麻煩高手幫我看看這封信

[SnowChang]

可否請哪位高手幫我看看這封信是否OK?

想寫封email問一間學校關於full-time work experience after college/university graduation的問題。
我想說的大意如下：
我目前已有10年的全職工作經驗。過去的四年當中，我在一間大學的夜間部上課，今年七月初將會拿到學士學位。我是否具備申請資格呢？(該校對工作經驗的定義是full-time work experience “after” college/university graduation)

Dear Sir/Madam:

I’m interested in applying for XXX MBA program and have a question concerning the work experience to ask. I have 10 year full-time work experience so far. While maintaining my full-time job, I have been studying in an evening college program for the past four years; I will receive my bachelor’s degree early this July. Am I eligible for the application in terms of full-time work experience “after” college/university graduation?

Sincerely,

[formosamba]

Hi Snow,

Personally, I think your case should be ok for application, since schools care the most about w/e. Although your bachelor degree will be received July this year, you still have 10 years of solid w/e.

FYI. I would edit your letter a little bit as below:

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Dear Sir/Madam:

I’m interested in applying for XXX MBA program and have a question regarding your work experience requirement here. I have 10 year full-time work experience so far. While maintaining my full-time job, I have been studying in an evening college program for the past four years; I will receive my bachelor’s degree early this July.

Given my current status above, am I eligible for the application in terms of full-time work experience “after” college/university graduation, as you mentioned in the application instructions? Thank you very much.


Sincerely,

[SnowChang]

Thank you for your help. I've sent the modified edition.