[問題]請問各位前輩急迫的作文問題!

[A7]

請問各位 前輩
我ㄧ直以來都是記這前輩網路得模版

Views differ greatly when it comes to the issue of whether (抄題目).
On the one hand, some people assert that (一個觀點); on the other hand, other people believe that (另一個觀點).
However, in the final judgment, I conclude that (從上面兩個觀點中選一個贊成的寫).
In the following discussion, I would like to present evidence to support my point of view.

The first argument that can be presented to develop my position is that (理由1)。For example/(舉例子)...........(敘述例子)................. There is no better example than this to illustrate the strength /weakness of 某方.

In addition, there is another reason for me to consider this statement to be wrong/right. The reason is not far to seek:原因2。To illustrate, let us consider that…(敘述例子)

Of course, it may be true that(自己觀點對立方的某些長處) in some conditions . Nevertheless, this alone does not constitute a sufficient support to claim that (對立方的觀點)。When the advantage and disadvantage of (此主題) are carefully compared, the most striking selection is obvious (that…寫自己的結論).

To sum up, given the reasons discussed above, which sometimes intertwine to form an organic whole and thus become more persuasive, we may safely arrive at the conclusion that (將結論換句話說or 再抄一次題目)

當然會加以修改成自己的模版形式
但是不知道可不可以用在
Opinion與 Comparision這種題目上?

或是它該如何來修改
以適合以上兩種呢?

請各位前輩指點迷津

謝謝各位…

[maloney]

老實說，我覺得第一句的模板就很不好，whether是是否的意思，用在some/other的題型就不合了，comparsion也不太好，可能可以用於自身比較的advantage and disadvntage，但是不同東西量的比較就不可以了，opinion就不可用。唯一可用的題型就是agree/disagree的題型。

one the one hand and oh other hand至However, in the final judgment, I conclude that都沒問題，可以說n the one hand, some people assert that reason one, one the other hand, on the other hand, other people believe that reasons 2，However, in the final judgment, I conclude that reson 3。不把however去掉，直接說in the final judgment, I conclude that the above two reasons can explain XXX。

這句也沒問題：The first argument that can be presented to develop my position is that (理由1)。For example/(舉例子)...........(敘述例子)................. There is no better example than this to illustrate the strength /weakness of 某方.

In addition, there is another reason for me to consider this statement to be wrong/right. The reason is not far to seek:原因2。To illustrate, let us consider that…(敘述例子)
不果請切記用這個模版is that後方勿用簡單句，因為前方模板有用到關係代名詞，比較級等，如果在此後方的你的句子是簡單字，整個句子會產生違合感，閱卷老師會知道你背模板。就我所知被知道背模板的話，分數是不會高的。

至於這句：
Of course, it may be true that(自己觀點對立方的某些長處) in some conditions . Nevertheless, this alone does not constitute a sufficient support to claim that (對立方的觀點)。When the advantage and disadvantage of (此主題) are carefully compared, the most striking selection is obvious (that…寫自己的結論).

這是用在自身比較merit and demerit才能用，用在opinion, 不同東西的comparsion，agree/disagree, some/others應該會死掉才對。

至於最後一句：To sum up, given the reasons discussed above, which sometimes intertwine to form an organic whole and thus become more persuasive, we may safely arrive at the conclusion that (將結論換句話說or 再抄一次題目)
真是太多人寫這個了，看了有點想吐。 而且好像是台灣學生在寫。
我覺得這個模板就是在混字數，老實說，我不認為會高分。我看過用這種模板寫的同學，大約在4-4.5分。很少有看到突破5分,5.5或是滿分的。模板也許不可或缺，不過卻不是最重要的，因為adress the topic task才是最重要的。再來是grammar錯愈少愈好。當然這是實力的累積，不過有人因為怕文法錯誤，所儘量用簡單句，但是如果套這個模板就容易備老師知道套模板。而ETS最討厭的就是抄襲，即便是套用相同模板也是抄襲的一種形式，一旦被知到抄襲，在GRE AWA是絕對0分計算的。TOEFL CBT TWE是沒辦法像GRE去scan，但是被知道套用模板也是分數不高。所以我建議這是英文寫作程度好可以用用看，當然如果不好，建議不用。
我完全沒套用這個混字數的模板，用自己發展出來的寫，考了兩次都是5分以上。一次5分，一次5.5分。
看看世界各國學生怎麼寫TWE的:
http://www.urch.com/forums/twe/
程度好好的真的很好，尤其是歐洲國家，印度，連馬來西亞都不錯。難怪在TWE上，台灣學生多數套模板是不能跟人家比的。

[A7]

非常感謝你這麼精闢的解答!!

我會思考及加油的

謝謝你!!

[maloney]

其實TWE真的還是要苦練，能發展出自己的模板最好。
就我所知，補習班助教說考GRE AWA，有人把argument and Issue 400題以上題目都寫完。CBT的TWE只有185題的樣子，其實我自己寫也只寫50題而已。
乾脆把我的自己的模板貼上來好了。

Opening:
When we talk about the question of (這裏可接who,whom,which,whether,why引導的子句)，everybody has different opinions of this issue,或是可寫it always raises a big debate among people. It is sometimes difficult to (這裏又如上可接以上子句) because it is such a complicated one.(這句是Jeff老師的萬用模板) Some people tend to think~~~,however, the other people are inclined to consider that~~~. Form my point of view, I think the above two reasons can answer the topic question.或是如果是立場選擇就用I prefer to ~~~rather than~~~~. In the following paragraphs, I will try to detail why~~~~~.

Body:
First of all/In the beginning/To begin with,開始寫第一個原因，最後結尾是 From what is mentioned above, we can know that~~~。

Secondly/In addition/Moreover/,開始寫第二段，最後寫 In the light of the above reasoning, 後方重覆第二段開頭語，需代換不同單字，重覆開頭話為加強語起。

如有第三段繼續掰，Thirdly/Furthermore,後方掰第三段理由。

Conclusion:
In conclusion/In summary/To sum up I can come up with my conclusion that/ I can conclude that重申立場。If we~~(自己的立場)，not only can we~~reaons1, but also we can reason2. Last but not the least, we can reaon3. 接下來用讓步句，然後在重申自己立場是最對的。

以下貼一篇我的TWE(有些grammar and tense的錯誤還沒更改):

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People are never satisfied with what they have; they always want something more or something different. Use specific reasons to support your answer.

When we talk about the question of whether people are never satisfied with what they have or they are, it always causes a big debate among people. It is sometimes difficult to discuss that people can restrain their desires or they are never satisfied what they own because it is such a complex issue. Some people tend to think people have abilities to control their desires; however, the other people are inclined to consider people aren’t satisfied with anything which they have. Form my point of view, I support that people are never satisfied with what they have and always want something more or something different. In the following paragraphs, I will try to detail why the things which people have can’t cater to their endless desires.

First of all, people want to chase their fantasies and make great progress in any aspect of their lives. To put it differently, people want to improve their living standard so that they never satisfied with what they have. As everybody knows, there are only horse that people can ride five hundred years ago. Due to poor transportation tools, people can’t reach much far areas. On the contrary, people can go abroad and travel remote countries by airplane in a short term because people are not satisfied with living standards. On account of this human characteristic, people can improve their living surroundings and invent a great number of useful equipment such as television, computers, Internet and so on which can help people feel convenient.

Secondly, people hope they can acquire the feeling of achievements and be admired by the other people; therefore, they are never satisfied with what they have and always want something more or something different. As you know, when you work in a big company, people always want to strive for higher positions than those of the other people. If people can endeavor after the powerful positions than those of the other people in the same company, they not only can receive more salary than the others but can be respected by their coworkers and followers as well. Form what is mentioned above, we can realize that people are never satisfied with what they have because they will be happy when they are honored by the other people.

Thirdly, some rotten people are never satisfied with what they have because of their vanity. It is pity that many government officials all over the world are so avaricious that they can’t stop their unreasonable desires. I took my country for example, to be frank with you, my president Shui-Bian Chen permit his wife, Shu-Zhen Wu, and his son-in-law, Chien-Ming Zhao taking bribes. Even though they are already in upper class in my country, Taiwan, they also committed numerous shameful crimes because of their vanity. According to the above example, we can know that some people are never satisfied with what they have and they always want something more due to their avarice.

To sum up, I can come up with my conclusion that people are never satisfied with what they have and always want something more or something different. Owing to this character, people not only can improve their living standards but also be admired by the other people in order to make them happy. Last but not the least, by some famous scandals, we can understand that some people can not help but cater for anything because of their vanity. Of course, may be some people hold opposite view of this topic; nevertheless, for the reasons I have presented above, I think my position is the most valid.