TWE練習-Q35 用AWA方法寫的 請大家評一評

[blue123736]

用AWA的方法寫的TWE

寫的不好

不過不知道會不會太繞

請各位大大幫忙評一評

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感激！
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題目：
035. (Agree or Disagree)
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Attending a live performance (for example, a play, concert, or sporting event) is more enjoyable than watching the same event on television. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
（同不同意看現場演出比在電視上看好）

Views differ greatly when it comes to the point that whether attending a live performance is more enjoyable than watching the same event on television. From my personal experience and observation of life, I agree with the statement that attending a live performance is indeed more enjoyable than watching the same event on television. Here are the reasons why.

It is obvious that if you watch a performance, no matter attending it by yourself or watching it through television, with some companies is better than if you do it alone. Because you can share your feeling with someone throughout the performance, especially for sporting events. When you are one of the supporters of a sports team, it would be a good feeling to watch the game with some others who is in the same attitude to support that team. The more these companies, the more exciting you can gain. Because you all have the same purpose - beat the opposite team to win the game. That’s why there are always so many people go to bars to watch sports match if they cannot attend the game by themselves.

Furthermore, attending a live performance can let you feel the exciting atmosphere that you cannot feel it through the television. The atmosphere comes from those people attending the performance. Everyone is expecting for the starting of the show. Everyone is expecting about the event. Under that atmosphere, you can easily share these kind of feeling and also become expecting and exciting about the performance.

If you watch a performance through the television, especially for those live events, there are often a lot of commercial advertisements interrupting the show. For continue watching the performance, you have to be tolerance to these advertisements. However, you do not have to tolerance these if you attending a live performance, because there is no such thing to interrupt you during the performance.

To sum up, from the abovementioned reasons, it is most reasonable for me to conclude that attending a live performance is more enjoyable then watching the same event on television.

[micht]

不知道 toefl essay寫法和AT差多少

看完我發覺不同的事是...
AT awa裡essay好像很少用第二人稱 you you you you??

does it matter?

[QQcandy]

我記的莫北北說過

最好是不要用 you... you.... you.... 的

因為 you 指的是讀者 ...

那讀者是谁 ?

就是悅卷老師了

[Quinton]

我記的莫北北說過

最好是不要用 you... you.... you.... 的

因為 you 指的是讀者 ...

那讀者是谁 ?

就是悅卷老師了

QQ糖∼妳也是莫老的得意門生啊！

今天上他的專題重播∼突然知道為何他要如此拼命的教書了（週末滿檔）

我想∼大概是∼他是傳說中的『殺手排行榜第一名∼火神邪神』吧！

老是喜歡討戰高難度的！
因為他說在美加教書有成就感∼會有各路英雄好漢∼拿不同的觀念問他！

就讓我聯想到∼『功夫』的情節了！

唉∼最近這幾天腦袋都還是功夫的劇情！！

[QQcandy]

ㄟ ~

超人先生...

你對功夫的狂熱...

如果能移到 AT....

那 700+ 沒問題啦 (Y)

[Quinton]

ㄟ ~

超人先生...

你對功夫的狂熱...

如果能移到 AT....
那 700+ 沒問題啦 (Y)

啊∼∼好熟悉啊！

今天才這樣被讀書會的伙伴罵過！！
還是一模一樣的話勒！！