再貼一次, 是第一個拒絕我的學校, 因此跟學校要了feedback, 直到上星期才給我回覆...後面再拒絕的學校就沒去要了...
以下僅供大家參考
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Dear Pudding,
(疑, 別鬧了, 我當然不是用布丁這個名字去申請的, 不然百發百中就不好玩了...
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Thank you for your application to the Simon School of Business. Although we were unable to extend an admission offer, the Admissions Committee is always happy to provide feedback about an applicant's application.
While a GMAT score of 640 is a strong score, the average GMAT score of our Taiwanese applicants is 667 and the average score of our current student body is 664. However your new score of 710, which was received after your admission decision, is a great improvement from your previous score.
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首先是GMAT的確是重要參考因素, 我剛被拒絕的時候寫信去說我第二天就要重考, 學校只冷冷的回覆 "The decision is final"; 等我考完回來死纏爛打的又update成績過去, 學校的口氣就變了, 很熱情的說要不要來申請春季班啊? Orz 不過當然也可能是我以小人之心度君子之腹啦...
其次是至少這所學校, 看來台灣學生是自己一個pool沒有被大陸學生的高分影響到, 這當然也只是我的揣測...)
The area for greatest improvement would be your essays. There were may spelling, grammatical and word-usage typos throughout your essays and the Admissions Committee felt that you could have done a better job "selling yourself" to the Simon program. In essay #2, your accomplishments need to be described in a way that makes them significant enough to leave a lasting impression on the reader. We were also confused by your mention of the All-Finance Conference in essay #1 when you had previously stated that you were interest in International Management and Marketing.
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1. essay #2原題如下:
Discuss three professional accomplishments which demonstrate your potential as a successful leader. (Limit to 500 words)
2. essay #1原題如下:
Describe your post-M.B.A. or post-M.S. career plans. How will a degree from the Simon School help you to achieve these goals? How does your past education and experience support your career objectives? (Limit to 500 words)
3. 我的working experience跟interests都是product / brand management以及marketing, 但是因為marketing其實是需要很扎實的finance功底, 而我的finance觀念爆爛, 因此希望透過MBA課程做個補強, 然而很明顯我的表達不夠清楚, 因而導致了校方的confused.
4. 此段重點是: do a better job "selling yourself" to the MBA program you apply to)
We appreciate your interest in reactivating your application for the January 2006 term. The Admissions Department would be happy to answer any questions or concerns you might have in the future. Please do not hesitate to contact our office at any time; we look forward to assisting you in the future.
Regards,
(姓名恕刪)
M.B.A. and M.S. Admissions
William E. Simon Graduate School of Business Administration
University of Rochester
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